L3 Writing Portfolio - Writing Workshop 1This internal assessment task requires you to create a range of fluent and coherent writing based on our over-arching theme for the year. We are studying a range of texts that explore relationships between generations, with a focus on the transition from boyhood to manhood.
Over the first two terms, you will draft 2 – 4 pieces of writing and at the end of term two, you will craft at least two pieces of writing for assessment. The deadline is 3.15pm on Friday 1st August 2014. Your work must be submitted electronically. You will draft your work using GoogleDocs and this will be used for feedback and ensuring authenticity. Your final submission may be in Word or Pages, or it may be the GoogleDoc you drafted your work in. The assessment will be based on how effectively your ideas are developed, sustained, and structured and how language features are used to create fluent and coherent writing. Use the Purdue Online Writing Laboratory to help with punctuation and spelling, layout register and a whole host of technical aspects of writing. You should also read the NZQA resources, including the annotated exemplars for this assessment. How to make me careRemember what Andrew Stanton said in his TED talk about how to tell a great story? Go back and review that clip if you want. He said: "Make me care." What does this look like in your work? Here's an example of something from a classmate's draft. It is already good in terms of ideas. We can add detail to make readers care.
Draft 1a - this is good. I walk in the door and am instantly hit with the rich smell of dinner. Mum just sees me, drops what she's doing and pulls me into a tight hug. Following this I began to realise how hard this has been for my family. Finally I was home, but how hard was this brief visit going to be? I suddenly realised how good it was to have huge meals, see the dogs which I have grown up with, to see my grandmothers puzzle again, seeing and hearing all the sights and sounds I have grown with my whole life. I went to bed full from a classic mother meal and delighted to be back home with my parents. Draft 1a - this is a little better at making the reader care. I stepped into the kitchen with a bashful, 'Hi, mum," and I was instantly assaulted by the rich aroma of venison, roast yams and potatoes along with mum's classic peppercorn gravy. Mum saw me, dropped the pot she'd been scrubbing and pulled me into a tight hug. There was dishwater and detergent dripping down my neck and I wanted to break away but I'd secretly been looking forward to a hug from mum for a while now, so I put up with it for a bit longer. I began to realise how hard this has been for my family. They also lost something when I started boarding. Finally I was home and very glad to have huge meals every night, see Jonty and Jacques, the Springer Spaniels I named after some South African cricketers, and which I raised from pups. While mum got the dinner ready, I dropped my bag in my room and saw that it was just as I left it - my Lego space shuttle still having pride of place on my shelf, alongside my rabbit skull and cap gun. The house all seemed just the same and I was surprised but I can't think why exactly. It's not like I wanted things to have changed. I still loved seeing my grandmother's puzzle again - she spent hours, if not days, on it and it means a lot to her. It was actually all very comforting, I suppose. Comforting and cosy. Even though the day had been your typical late-February Ida Valley scorcher, I still sort of faked feeling cold so I could cuddle up to mum, just a bit, while she was watching her favourite, Coro. I'd always hated Coronation Street but I put up with it, just this once. That night, I went to bed full from a classic mother meal and delighted to be back home with my parents. Accuracy is very importantPreparing your work for final assessmentHere are the slides we used in class in the final two weeks of this portfolio project. There are slides on how to improve your work and some examples of work - your work -that needs editing - as well as some models of accurate punctuation.
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Task 1 deadline: Thursday 27th February.Task 2 deadline: Friday 4th July.Do not be put off by the seemingly simple video above. There are some good lessons in it, such as the use of the active over the passive.
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